Wednesday, May 4, 2011

More Six Word Thrillers

Here are some six word thrillers written for Holy Worlds Christian Fantasy Forum's six word story challenge:

The policeman hid the bloody knife.

His bulletproof vest saved him again.

"This coffin is uncomfortable," he muttered.

(c) 2011 Jonathan Garner

12 comments:

  1. Very good. The last one is best, I think. All have their potential, however.

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  2. The last one is best, yes. Though it could be better, I think. Maybe like this?

    "Uncomfortable." I shifted in the coffin.

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  3. Those were awesome. I really like the potential of the first one.

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  4. Thanks, Sir Emeth! I agree it would be better to show rather than tell, but I haven't come up with a satisfactory way of showing it.

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  5. Thanks, Michael! I like to muse on how the policeman could be doing something good, even if it doesn't seem that way.

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  6. Awesome. :D Your Hemingway's always hold such mystery. I love the first one; there are so many different stories you could make to suit that one! Great job, Jonathan. :D

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  7. @Jonathan: Does he need to be doing something good? Is he a bent cop? Hmm. His partner is not warped, and he's hiding it from him? Hmm. Lots of possibilities. I'll just be quiet now.

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  8. No need to be quiet. Comments are welcome.

    There truly are lots of possibilities. For example: Is he covering up for a friend he knows is innocent?

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  9. What about planted evidence against him? How will he clear his name?

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